Essay #16

Simone

English 9

Mr. H. Salsich

March 30

Reasons for Rebellion

An Essay on Why People Would Rebel

People are more powerful than you think. There are always reasons for people to be unhappy or unsatisfied with the way things are going, but the remarkable thing is that they can put that anger and unhappiness into action and make a change themselves. People should not be underestimated. Whether it be in the novel Julius Caesar, or in my life, rebellion should be taken seriously because one person can make a big difference, and there are many reasons why they would want to (inversion) .

There are many reasons why one or many would want to rebel, but the first thing that comes to my mind is power. Everyone wants a little piece of power (alliteration). Whether it be over the household, the school soccer team, or even the country, dominance is greatly valued. Nobody likes being told what to do, when to do it, or where to do it; they like doing things on their own time at their own pace, and if they were willing the fight for that freedom (alliteration), a rebellion could rise. Unsatisfactory leadership skills would be another reason for a rebellion. If I was not pleased with the way things were being run, I would stand up and say something; I would not sit there and pretend like nothing was wrong. If the figure of authority was not making good verdicts (F.A.S.T), I would try my hardest to get them out of the domineering (F.A.S.T) position. The last reason for rebellion is anger. If someone has enough animosity towards someone or something, that anger will charge them to make the changes that the leader fails to make. Anger gives us the adrenaline that can strengthen us to move mountains. Rebellion is a powerful force that can be achieved if you really want something or someone to change badly enough.

Rebelling against authority is an action that takes great courage (verbal opener). Whether it be rebelling against your ruler or not listening to directions in class, it still takes bravery. Also, people have all different reasons to rebel, but no matter what the reason, or how large the scale, it should not be underestimated. People who take action can change the world.

Self-Assessment:

1) An issue that I am still trying to work on is developing my ideas into words more clearly. Often I am thinking one thing, but it comes out different on paper.

2) A weak point that I see in this essay is the third chunk. I don't think it really explains what I was trying to communicate.

3) I think a strong point in this essay is my introductory paragraph. I think it leads into the essay nicely and clearly.

4) I would give myself a B on this essay.