Essay #8

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Main Point or Thesis of Essay: do not judge a beautiful picture by its cover, everyone and everything have hidden problems
bell word: deceive


Opening Paragraph:

Hook: the world is a beautiful "twinkling star", but every nook and cranny of it has it's own problems
Comment on Hook: even serene, romantic France has its many conflicts
Comment on Hook: "a whole world with all its greatness and littleness" is attractive on the surface, but looks can be deceiving
Thesis: just like the old saying states, "don't judge a book on its cover"

First Body Paragraph

echos: swindle, defraud

TS: "Chateau and hut" the poorest and richest parts of France go hand and hand
SD: but those stone faces guarding the chateaus are swindling because behind those resistant features are "dangling figures"
CM: if one does something wrong, one will be hanged, no discussion, nobody tries to stop it because they know that it is useless
CM: "so, sublimer intelligences may read in the feeble shining of this earth of ours" because of injustices like this that happen behind closed doors
SD: Dickens is saying that behind every defrauding good thing there is a bad thing
CM: the world has "greatness and littleness" but what we choose to do with that is up to us
CM: "a whole province of France - all France itself - lay under the night sky", the good and the bad, the poor and the rich, the deceiving and the truthful, all together as one country
CS: on the smooth surface, France is the home of greatness, but underneath it is just littleness, it is so far underneath the charming surface that only the "sublimer intelligence" can sense it

Second Body Paragraph

echoes: outwit, delude

TS: just as all the "twinkling stars" in this world deal with their own problems, so do I
SD: I am a "twinkling star" just trying to make it in this huge galaxy
CM: I started out dim, but every time I overcome a problem, I get a little brighter
CM: I may look as bright as a star but my shining is sometimes outwitting for I have many problems just like everyone else
SD: I, as a person, definitely have "greatness and littleness"
CM: I have somethings about me that are good, and things that are bad, but I try to keep a deluding front so that no one would know the littleness about me
CM: everyone does and nobodies perfect
CS: Your light may seem dim, but it is getting brighter everyday

Concluding Paragraph

Hook: the world is bright, but there are many things about it that are dim
Comment on Hook: everything in this in this world has its problems, even if that seems impossible
Comment on Hook: every place in the world has its "greatness and littleness" we just need to learn to look past the littleness
Re-Statement of Thesis: no matter what or who you are looking at, you can never judge them without truly knowing what is going on inside them

Simone
Mr. H. Salsich
English 9
November 18

"Greatness and Littleness" In Everyone And Everything:

An Essay About A Tale Of Two Cities And My Life

TS The world is a beautiful "twinkling star", but inside every nook and cranny there is some kind of problem. SD Even serene, romantic France has many conflicts. CM "A whole world with all its greatness and littleness" is attractive on the surface, but looks can be deceiving. CS The same old saying, "don't judge a book by it's cover" applies to France and the "twinkling star" that we call our home.

TS "Chateau and hut", rich and poor, two opposites that strangely go hand in hand in A Tale of Two Cities' France, a beguile place with a shining exterior (appositive). SD Everything looks perfect on the surface, but those stone faces guarding the chateaus are swindling because behind those resistant features are "dangling figures". CM If one does something wrong, one will be hanged, no questions asked, and no one will try to stop it because they know that their poor voices have to significance in their rich government. CM "[...] so, sublimer intelligence may read in the feeble shinging of this earth of ours" because of injustices like extraneous (F.A.S.T) hangings. SD In this paragraph, Dickens is saying that with every defrauding good, attractive, admirable thing in this world, there is a bad, abominable (F.A.S.T), side to it. CM The world and France particularly have "greatness and littleness" that go accordingly with each other, but which we choose to see is up to our perception. CM "A whole province of France - all France itself - lay under the night sky", the good and the bad, the poor and the rich, the deceiving and the truthful, all together as one country. CS On the smooth surface, France is the home to greatness, but underneath it is just littleness, it is so far underneath the charming surface that only "sublimer intelligences" can sense it.

TS Just as all "twinkling stars" deal with their own problems, I deal with great difficulty in my life as well. SD I am a "twinkling star" just trying to make my way in this huge galaxy. CM I started out dim, but every time I overcome a problem, I get a little bit brighter. CM I may look as dazzling (F.A.S.T.) as the North Star, but my shining is sometimes outwitting because I have many problems just like anyone else. SD I, as a person, definitely have "greatness and littleness", shining in some areas, but lacking in others, subsequent (F.A.S.T) at one thing, but failing at another, constantly developing new imperfections and new strengths (coordinate cumulative sentence). CM I have some things about me that are good, and things that are bad, but I try to keep a deluding front so that no one would see the things that cause me to have "littleness". CM The thing that keeps me going though, is the fact that everyone has littleness and I'm not the only one with flaws. CS Today your light may shine softly, but tomorrow it could be more luminous than ever.

TS The world is bright, but there are many dim things about it. SD Everything and everyone in this world has some kind of problem or quarrel, even if that seems impossible. CM Every place in this world has it's "greatness and littleness", we just need to learn to look past the littleness. CS No matter what or who you are looking at, you can never judge the book by it's cover because in most cases, the cover is misleading.

Self-Assessment:

1) An issue that I am still working is weeding in my sentences. I am still trying to take out every unnecessary word.

2) I think a strong point in this essay is concluding paragraph. I think it just wraps up my essay very nicely.

3) A weak point in my essay is my first body paragraph. It was difficult for me to portray what Dickens was trying to say in that paragraph.

4) I would give myself a B+ on this essay.